01-08-2013, 11:54 AM
hi destiny,
it's lovely, and i'm serious when i say that, but that's all it is, lovely. it has very little depth and in truth is more of ditty.
whether we like the conflict of two stanza or not isn't the problem, the problem is, it's a cup cake poem it needs some more ingredients like; an image, originality, a proper rhyme scheme or non. something to lick or bite on. do you want to make cup cakes or do you want to make a rich fruit cake with an absinthe topped creme brulee chaser?
it's lovely, and i'm serious when i say that, but that's all it is, lovely. it has very little depth and in truth is more of ditty.
whether we like the conflict of two stanza or not isn't the problem, the problem is, it's a cup cake poem it needs some more ingredients like; an image, originality, a proper rhyme scheme or non. something to lick or bite on. do you want to make cup cakes or do you want to make a rich fruit cake with an absinthe topped creme brulee chaser?