01-08-2013, 05:31 AM
I enjoyed it! I like horror stories. This had some nice imagery, especially the first line: "You followed the carrion crow."
Besides the misspellings arbil noticed, the line: "The goblins black sweat will stain your clothes" reads clumsily to me. Maybe just removing "The" or "will" could help?
Besides the misspellings arbil noticed, the line: "The goblins black sweat will stain your clothes" reads clumsily to me. Maybe just removing "The" or "will" could help?