01-04-2013, 10:28 AM
hi brandon
the jury is out on naming haiku so i wouldn't worry too much. i do and don't depending on if i want to get an extra line in
i say it verges more on senryu because of the non factual parts. but a nice one nonetheless.
in nature, thunder doesn't sing it makes a noise lullaby personifies the thunder. i think Gaia would be more senryu because it's part of a belive and not factual. a smile can be don use : and )
the jury is out on naming haiku so i wouldn't worry too much. i do and don't depending on if i want to get an extra line in
i say it verges more on senryu because of the non factual parts. but a nice one nonetheless.in nature, thunder doesn't sing it makes a noise lullaby personifies the thunder. i think Gaia would be more senryu because it's part of a belive and not factual. a smile can be don use : and )
(01-03-2013, 02:00 PM)brandontoh Wrote: Hi! I'm not sure if it's alright to name a Haiku, but I did anyways. Once again, thanks for reading my poem! =)
Sleep Tight
Sky darkens, air chills
Raindrops, thunders are singing
Gaia's lullaby