Sex (My Life) (explicit)

[BennyBoy]

Thanks for the critique! I did not notice the confusion in the "hard and fat" line. I think you're absolutely correct about the rest (the last stanza is incredibly trite).

Here's what I learned: be subtle, and ...

Can you explain what you mean by "pick a route you want the poem to go down and go down it"? Do you mean keep the tone consistent (horrific, comedy, or horror/comedy?). I suppose some lines are pure comedy and some are more horror, so the poem may be going for different effects at different parts.

Thanks again!