01-02-2013, 04:42 AM
Thanks for the critique arbil_poieo; I may re-write this poem or start a new one, but either way I'll take your advice to heart. 
Better title, more detail, more imagery.
And I'm glad you enjoyed it Heartafire. It's one of my first attempts, but as long it's somewhat amusing I suppose it could be considered a success.
Better title, more detail, more imagery.
And I'm glad you enjoyed it Heartafire. It's one of my first attempts, but as long it's somewhat amusing I suppose it could be considered a success.