Big Cat Lay Down One Eve

[rowens]

Your English seemed good enough. But you never know. So I figured poems could be a lot worse. I don't know the poet, but I had my own subjective ideas when I read it. And people talk all kinds of ways down around Broadway in the wee hours of the night or in the middle of the day, some days. So it was suggestive to me, but I was being suggested to by memories of others' drunken words. It's hard to know the writer's intent; you get into what you read, and don't know if what you like is what the writer doesn't care for.

I like things to be loose, complicated, and a bit confused sounding. But that's me. There was a lot more energy in the longer bit, but the newer version is more clear and visible. I guess that's what you want. I didn't know; you sound like you got fine English on tap to me. But I didn't know what you were going for here.