Butterfly Bridge edit 1. spelling corrections by uncle vert

[tectak]

oh and the last line in stanza 14 rhythm seems to jst be non existent, i don't know if you did that on purpose to add variety but it would make my reading much more pleasing if the same rhythm was constant.

Hi aaron,
You are giving this a good picking over....thanks. Sometimes "rhythm" and "emphasis" seem momentarily incompatible........usually this is due to the more common definition of accent.
The line you refer to needs a long "an" so it reads "like/an im/a go/new a/ bridge."
This equates nicely to all the stanzas. For example, S1 "or /horse sure/hoofed that/hauled the/ dray".
I got well stressed by erthona on this site, some time back, for relying too insistantly on flat and conventional syllabic accent.......the best advice I got was to read the thing, out loud, as I intended it to be heard. If I had to strangle the words to keep strict rhythm then change or leave it and suffer the consequences. The advice was good because the writer shames himself into correction BUT once acceptable to the writer, having "corrected" , the reader needs to operate in the same auditorium to get the SAME effect. This is sometimes too much to ask
Best,
tectak