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Money's trouble

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12-30-2012, 10:46 PM

Hi Jae,
Likeing the edits. Much smoother and particularly like the change to the last line much sharper and better for it.
Good work
AJ

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Money's trouble - by Jae Mc Donnell - 12-29-2012, 01:42 PM

RE: Money's trouble - by smakpopy - 12-29-2012, 02:01 PM

RE: Money's trouble - by cidermaid - 12-29-2012, 03:28 PM

RE: Money's trouble - by cidermaid - 12-30-2012, 10:46 PM

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