When the wind stops
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Hi Rookie,

love the wordplay immensely.
Another minor typo: aggresively

I am absolutely with Todd re your feel for rhythm.
As to the long lines stanza I am as of yet undecided.

cheers serge
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Messages In This Thread
When the wind stops - by Rookie - 12-28-2012, 02:19 PM
RE: When the wind stops - by Todd - 12-28-2012, 02:29 PM
RE: When the wind stops - by Rookie - 12-28-2012, 02:39 PM
RE: When the wind stops - by Todd - 12-28-2012, 10:43 PM
RE: When the wind stops - by billy - 12-28-2012, 05:33 PM
RE: When the wind stops - by winterborn - 12-30-2012, 09:35 AM
RE: When the wind stops - by serge gurkski - 12-30-2012, 02:44 PM



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