12-30-2012, 08:55 AM
I like this piece, it is a light and fun look at love 
There were two things that I thought of when I read this, in terms of a critique:
I think that "there are plenty of fish" rather than "there is plenty of fish" makes more sense grammatically.
The line "made my heart shine so bright" was a little out of place to me, it's nice, but maybe cliche? That is just my opinion though, so feel free to ignore it
Other than those things, I enjoyed this piece, the third stanza was my favourite, I like the rhythm and the images that you present there - the idea that you had to try different combinations and put in so much effort before "hooking" her
There were two things that I thought of when I read this, in terms of a critique:
I think that "there are plenty of fish" rather than "there is plenty of fish" makes more sense grammatically.
The line "made my heart shine so bright" was a little out of place to me, it's nice, but maybe cliche? That is just my opinion though, so feel free to ignore it
Other than those things, I enjoyed this piece, the third stanza was my favourite, I like the rhythm and the images that you present there - the idea that you had to try different combinations and put in so much effort before "hooking" her