12-29-2012, 07:18 AM
hi joatmon.
you are probably right. Bill's criticism above about wordiness and your's bout using the colloquial are both substantiated. While I don't think I will change this one, I could try to write a purer version of it.
My little text reflects a street scene from last night and my justification for writing as we talked (and thought, and felt). There is however a core in it, something that could be put in a nutshell.
Here it could be: want dog / they suck / but humans more.
cheers and thank you for looking into this :-) Serge
Hello Keith,
thank you for reading. If they just would not die that soon, I would rather prefer to be a dog, medium sized and awesomely good looking to the "bitches" (dog talk for "ladies"). ;-)
How does a dog bark in England? Wooff?
cheers
Serge
Thank you Hollylove,
matter of fact is I like it here. Dogs have no feelings for the lofty, the Wolkenkuckucksheim. I won't start to misspell the Aristophanian word here. ;-)
kisses
serge
you are probably right. Bill's criticism above about wordiness and your's bout using the colloquial are both substantiated. While I don't think I will change this one, I could try to write a purer version of it.
My little text reflects a street scene from last night and my justification for writing as we talked (and thought, and felt). There is however a core in it, something that could be put in a nutshell.
Here it could be: want dog / they suck / but humans more.
cheers and thank you for looking into this :-) Serge
Hello Keith,
thank you for reading. If they just would not die that soon, I would rather prefer to be a dog, medium sized and awesomely good looking to the "bitches" (dog talk for "ladies"). ;-)
How does a dog bark in England? Wooff?
cheers
Serge
Thank you Hollylove,
matter of fact is I like it here. Dogs have no feelings for the lofty, the Wolkenkuckucksheim. I won't start to misspell the Aristophanian word here. ;-)
kisses
serge