First date jitters

[billy]

i like the poem a lot, a few nits though, i do think the caps on every line make the read falter. for instance; i paused to long instead of moving on to the 2nd line etc.

I'm not a big fan of love poems, but this is for practice, so any and all comments welcome.

A good idea
May find itself rot
By the fiend that is cliché

Should we hand red rose to much of a jump from hand to rose, you need to transition with 'a' or 'the'
To winter’s cold veil
Will it abolish sun from ray? again the line needs to transition 'its' would work, though this is more of a nit

Are we set rigid
Against falling leaf and hail
If this kiss should fail? really solid end, though the end rhyme feels out of character.

better than most love poems, what i liked about the poem was the fact it had an start, a middle and an end. love poems just have a shag
i think you can make it better with just a small edit. but i do like it as it stands.

thanks for the read.