First ever senryu (hope I've done it right

[billy]

she means wise i mean cold .

and yes yes yes, to

I think I like the challenge of the 5 7 5 format, so if I go again I think I'll keep it.

an excellent example of how to accept feedback. looking forward to seeing more of you in the short form forum.
the 575 is really good to use if you want to learn how to stick to a strict scheme. a stepping stone to some of the larger forms that we have on the site.