12-27-2012, 05:12 PM
and try to leave some feedback, 
i think the poem needs to be more clear in it's meaning.
There’s plenty of fish
was my mum’s favorite line
while my only great wish
was that she would be mine.
this reads like you wish your mum will be yours.
a suggestion would be;
There’s plenty of fish
my mum’s favorite line.
But My only wish
was for sweet Clementine.
of course you could use any name that rhymes.
try and keep a constant meter and try and make some of the phrase original, at present a lot of what's being said here has been said a lot of times already.
i think the poem needs to be more clear in it's meaning.
There’s plenty of fish
was my mum’s favorite line
while my only great wish
was that she would be mine.
this reads like you wish your mum will be yours.
a suggestion would be;
There’s plenty of fish
my mum’s favorite line.
But My only wish
was for sweet Clementine.
of course you could use any name that rhymes.
try and keep a constant meter and try and make some of the phrase original, at present a lot of what's being said here has been said a lot of times already.