seasonal

[Leanne]

Terrific idea -- I keep telling people that haiku and sonnet are closely related forms but they don't get it. It's not about the number of words, it's about the spirit of the form, the question/answer thing. But anyway, let's have a look

Foaling.

Time, feet first out burst. -- the inverted syntax doesn't work for me at all, I'm afraid -- this is definitely the line to change, as you use "burst" here and "bursting" in the next line, which in a short poem is a bit of a waste
Budding, swelling bursting forth.
Bright light, new day. Start.-- but a gorgeous image for a starting stanza/poem

Nurturing

Start right, richly veined.
Overflowing growing grass.
Soft breath nuzzling.

Breeding

Nuzzling, nipping.
Leap, thrust, hold. Innocent eyes. -- love the action in this, it's energetic (and a little voyeuristic!)
May pierce, slipped, held deep.

Growing.

Deep sleep, dappled shade. -- lovely sounds lead to equally lovely images
Bugs biting, raindrops kissing.
Play fighting, free running.

Resting.

Running sweat, deep heat.
Matron guarded, siesta.
Refreshing dawn dew

Replenishing.

Due for a long drink.
Full fat gloaming, evening mist. -- "full fat gloaming" is great
Dark green gathering.

Weaning.

Gathering clouds pile
Flanked deep, heaving gates aside.
Hard tack, ground to creep.

Learning.

Creep, cross over. Call
on the wing. Path flight first thought.
Restricted. Re-zoned.

Leaving.

Zoned in, colour cloned. -- not sure about the re-use of "zoned", but "colour cloned" is very nice
Leaching last connecting shades.
Last step, door is closed.

Embryo.

Closed off, bagged bundle.
Fast expanding awareness.
Fruitful winter store.

Lockdown.

Store shed, bellies full.
Cracks plugged to mud and decay.
Main stay, straw and hay

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Waiting.

Hay prepped, full mangers.
Cloy clods, frost, sun, wind clearing.
Emerging bud time.

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The idea certainly works! Sorry, this is a bit heavier critique than usual in this forum but it's a bit longer than usual