12-25-2012, 01:29 AM
Thank you twisted angel for your positive input I will lose those lines as both of you have now mentioned that and I can also see that they carry very little weight. I still have not successfully put across the full spectrum of emotions that I felt and want to portray yet I do not think it is necessary to add more to this piece. I am in the process of writing another piece to accompany this one to help fully portray the aftermath and pain that is felt altho the style will be completely different, do you think this could work?