Peace in Prospect

[arbil_poieo]

The edit improved it by cutting out the "fat." Like I've told you, it has some good solid lines but to validate them it needs images. The intent is strong, it just needs depth (which I don't know if I can give more critique since it's in novice) I don't know if that makes any sense to you, if not then let me know. These are just suggestions, because like you my poetry is still a working progress so it can be a little overwhelming...so all this is just my opinion.

There's something about this that I like and appreciate.