This Winter (2nd edit)

[Uncle Vertical]

Well that's why I put optionally on that one

Here's the thing I was thinking...cleft of this rock is an allusion to Moses hiding as God's glory past before him. Not what the poem is about but definitely a literary allusion. Your previous words were I am which makes me reflect on the name of God revealed to Moses from the burning bush I am isolating them on the previous line would help set off that effect. It's okay, if that's too cute for you...just the way my mind makes connections.

Thanks Todd, I now understand what you are saying. Do you think a general audience would catch that effect? (not that any general audience is likely to ever see it). I was quite delighted that you picked up on the Moses allusion but quite frankly I didn't even think about the "I am" tie in with God's name being revealed to Moses when I wrote it. I will try and get that in there and thanks again for your thoughtful input.