12-23-2012, 06:23 AM
hi 2
we don't use the polls for poetry. it leads to misuse and stops real feedback
welcome to to the forum.
the 1st stanza feels very weak to start the poem. a suggestion would be to use the 2nd line as the first. ideally you could use some stronger lines with a few images. another point is that it feels very generic. usually the two go hand in hand.
we don't use the polls for poetry. it leads to misuse and stops real feedback
welcome to to the forum.
the 1st stanza feels very weak to start the poem. a suggestion would be to use the 2nd line as the first. ideally you could use some stronger lines with a few images. another point is that it feels very generic. usually the two go hand in hand.