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The Promise
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12-21-2012, 04:31 AM
As has been said, you convey the emotion competently and have the basis of appropriate imagery which you seem to apply with care. If the metre was consistent there'd be little left to do with this piece other than relax some of the more 'forced' sounding rhymes (verse2 in particular.) Enjoyable read!
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The Promise - by ellz483 - 12-17-2012, 04:55 PM
RE: The Promise - by billy - 12-17-2012, 05:30 PM
RE: The Promise - by Leanne - 12-17-2012, 05:41 PM
RE: The Promise - by ellz483 - 12-17-2012, 10:54 PM
RE: The Promise - by Pete Ak - 12-21-2012, 04:31 AM
RE: The Promise - by ellz483 - 12-21-2012, 12:05 PM
RE: The Promise - by Pete Ak - 12-22-2012, 06:12 PM
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