12-17-2012, 04:55 PM
Oh, darkest nights, the sighs of folly
Icy raindrops on the windowpane
Bring me evergreen wreaths of holly
And, lo, tell me not our love was vain
Softest kisses run across my skin
They trace the scars of time and heartbreak
Wispy, golden hair has now grown thin
Timid resolution we now make
In sleep, I feel the weight of promise
Your honeyed eyes on my back bear down
Sweetest whispers of things said honest
I wait in honor to take your crown
At last, I claim my place beside you
We dine and feast, then our marriage bed
Love fulfilled like no one ever knew
Come midnight, at last we rest our heads
Just wondering what people think. Ideas on how it could improve are appreciated, of course! Thank you!
I edited it- this is the new version! I totally took into consideration everyone's comments!
Oh, darkest nights, the sighs of folly
Raindrops fill the windowpane
Bring me evergreen wreaths of holly
Tell me not our love was vain
Ardent kisses run across my skin
And trace the scars of longing
Below us the bells announce our sin
In heightened senses of belonging
In sleep, I feel the weight of promise
Your eyes on my back bear down
Whispers of things said honest
I wait in honor to take your crown
At last, I claim my place beside you
We dine and feast, then our bed
Love fulfilled like no one ever knew
Come, at last we rest our heads
Icy raindrops on the windowpane
Bring me evergreen wreaths of holly
And, lo, tell me not our love was vain
Softest kisses run across my skin
They trace the scars of time and heartbreak
Wispy, golden hair has now grown thin
Timid resolution we now make
In sleep, I feel the weight of promise
Your honeyed eyes on my back bear down
Sweetest whispers of things said honest
I wait in honor to take your crown
At last, I claim my place beside you
We dine and feast, then our marriage bed
Love fulfilled like no one ever knew
Come midnight, at last we rest our heads
Just wondering what people think. Ideas on how it could improve are appreciated, of course! Thank you!
I edited it- this is the new version! I totally took into consideration everyone's comments!
Oh, darkest nights, the sighs of folly
Raindrops fill the windowpane
Bring me evergreen wreaths of holly
Tell me not our love was vain
Ardent kisses run across my skin
And trace the scars of longing
Below us the bells announce our sin
In heightened senses of belonging
In sleep, I feel the weight of promise
Your eyes on my back bear down
Whispers of things said honest
I wait in honor to take your crown
At last, I claim my place beside you
We dine and feast, then our bed
Love fulfilled like no one ever knew
Come, at last we rest our heads