I'm not a great poet or anything...

[Jae Mc Donnell]

I'm just wondering if this is any good at all...


Maybe this was because of you

I just didn’t know what else to do

Maybe it’s come down to this

I just can’t cope with so much nothingness

Maybe I can’t pretend anymore

And now I’m looking for the exit door

But I won’t tell anyone

That you were my everything

That you were my sun

And they won’t see my cry tonight

I know I’m strong enough to fight

And if even I’m not,

My tears won’t change a thing

And all I have are sad lyrics to sing

I’ll sing them for you,

but you’ll never hear

You’ll never be that near

So all I can do

Is write this poem for you

Even though you’ll never see

Just how much you mean to me

It’ll be over, I keep telling myself

I’ll put these feelings back on the shelf

I’ll be ok, I’ll be just fine

Even if you’re never mine

How are things mate. Just to let you know I'm at an early stage of writting poetry my self, so take anything I say with a pinch of salt. But how I feel with this sort of poem the lines and imagery need to be sharp and direct. I find if they get to long you tend to lose the emostional impact. I would reccommend saying the words aloud and see if you feel their impact.
I do hope this is helpful. Good look and keep writting.