12-11-2012, 04:28 AM
Nice work, this reallty puts over the feeling of factory life on nights, I really like the opening stanza and how you put over the sence of loss of the day youve slept through. Not too sure the last stanza works that well it feels a bit rushed and like you dont care when clearly you do and I did. I HATE nights Thanks for the read TOMH
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