3rd shift

[cidermaid]

I think I got the same image of Billy initially and my final conclusion was that i thought it was the mind re-ordering itself after perhaps a car crash. But I agree with Billy here I was left puzzled after reading and could not get into it.
For me the 2nd stanza needs to take my thoughts into a more definate place before the final stanza.

I liked the first stanza in that it grabbed my attention.

Thanks for the read.