Haiku

[Keith]

couple of things imo first is i think this is senryu cos is about people as haiku is nature

an like billy the use of 'undertow' a little confusing..have heard it used to describe the 'rat race' an life in general, but in a depressing morbid way not ever an uplifting one

i think am not understanding its use in this or totally missing the point

This is a car wreck of a senryu / Haiku mainly because I dont know the difference and I didnt even catch the 5/7/5 its about people and nature but I'm not sure what that tells me.

I think I should let it slip under the ice and get carried by the undertow to the lonley place were dead seniku go.