In a Doppelganger’s Dreamworld

[billy]

As parabolic cloud drifts rise overhead the syntax is struggling in this line a suggestion would be: cloud-drifts, i's also suggest dropping 'as'
And haloes of extinction whiplash his eyes

“It isn’t paradisial,”
He wryly observes,
“Those crows spewing up in my dreams.”

“Fill their horrid beaks with what,
My liquid ribs?
Wraith flesh and blood is delightful I hear,

The Styxians later will feast on its bones
And slice through its rinds without a thought…”

In a doppelgangers dream world
Where nobody enters and nobody leaves, is 'where' needed?
They’ll exhibit my remains---in a doppelganger’s

Dream world, I’ll be free! this line feels too forced, for me the poem ended on the one above.

it's a bit freaky but you have a good basis for a small edit.

thanks for the read.