The serpents sleep

[billy]

i've read this one a few times and i'm having a time seeing something i can comment on in understanding. then i had a eureka moment...i think....one of the serpents is a hose pipe. the other is the man asleep.

Half hidden by uncut grass would lawn be better because of the repetition?
my snake belly, waiting to be filled
He lies inside bound by quilts, twisted by the day
begging sleep, steeped in need, his eyes role shut,
only pretence. i'm seeing him as a lazy bastard.

She moves cups in the kitchen
I can hear the clatter of precious water, does water clatter?
drip on the drainer

I lie outside waiting to loose my tongue,
from linen to mortar to blade of grass I hear the call
she hasn’t heard

his serenity his recurring thought, stroked by heat
never August rain, only spoken once
she plays the loop with each shelved item. i'm struggling a little with this stanza?

Frustration drips again,
but today is different
understanding quickens her pace,
no time wasted, if she is right riddles solved if she is right riddles solved (another struggle)
could it be, could it be?

my belly fills to bursts a vipers kiss
I answer his call,
pounding on windows
belting down gutters
rhythm of first drops
rain dance on roof tops.
I carry the drums of damp air
tranquillity tapping on tiles
sleep streams through his body

we cry our tears in the garden
her clothes soaked we stand together
the rain and the maker. i love this last stanza, it can be read a few ways and so has a good kind of ambiguity.

some good stuff but i did have a couple of problems understanding. the last stanza was excellent. i also felt the penultimate stanza was solid.
thanks for the read.