11-18-2012, 06:00 PM
Don't really have any exact points where i can give feedback, just the whole "every-line-has-to-rhyme" seems a bit, diluted?
I could relate to most of it, and i liked the last line especially much!
"I dreamed I stopped dreaming, I dreamed she was with me"
I could relate to most of it, and i liked the last line especially much!
"I dreamed I stopped dreaming, I dreamed she was with me"