11-14-2012, 05:11 PM
Hmm...this thread is old. Do people on these forums read old threads?
Well, it was in the thread list, and since I have been known to have my own high horse, well, I read the poem. And I swear, I have been sitting on exactly the same high horse as the person in the poem!
I also assumed it was from a girl's perspective, most likely because I'm a girl and I don't think I've ever met a (non-religious) guy who is even capable of seeing that perspective.
I can also answer TwistedAngel's question - "what's the harm?" Try being a chaste girl in a society like this and you'll eventually become bitter too, especially at the other girls in your society who you come to see actually have "trained" the men to expect sex from you when you don't even want them touching you. Then it's no skin off their nose--they just dump you to find a "normal" girl and you spend your years alone--(Quick summary)
I've gotten over that, but I had a huge chip on my shoulder specifically about this subject/situation for many years.
I agree with everything that was said so far too. I was going to say that, when writing a poem, it is most potent when you focus just on one topic and don't mix up too much or too many different subjects in it, as you did at the end. You can make a good poem by taking a very small thing and looking at it from many different perspectives. Like Blake's poem shows:
To see a world in a grain of sand
And a heaven in a wild flower
Hold infinity in the palm of your hand
And eternity in an hour.
I had an English professor who put a shell on the desk and told us to write a poem about it. I came up with a very lovely poem
. To my dismay, I ended up burning it when I burnt all my diaries in 2006 
(don't ask 
).
Well, it was in the thread list, and since I have been known to have my own high horse, well, I read the poem. And I swear, I have been sitting on exactly the same high horse as the person in the poem!
I also assumed it was from a girl's perspective, most likely because I'm a girl and I don't think I've ever met a (non-religious) guy who is even capable of seeing that perspective.
I can also answer TwistedAngel's question - "what's the harm?" Try being a chaste girl in a society like this and you'll eventually become bitter too, especially at the other girls in your society who you come to see actually have "trained" the men to expect sex from you when you don't even want them touching you. Then it's no skin off their nose--they just dump you to find a "normal" girl and you spend your years alone--(Quick summary)
I've gotten over that, but I had a huge chip on my shoulder specifically about this subject/situation for many years.
I agree with everything that was said so far too. I was going to say that, when writing a poem, it is most potent when you focus just on one topic and don't mix up too much or too many different subjects in it, as you did at the end. You can make a good poem by taking a very small thing and looking at it from many different perspectives. Like Blake's poem shows:
To see a world in a grain of sand
And a heaven in a wild flower
Hold infinity in the palm of your hand
And eternity in an hour.
I had an English professor who put a shell on the desk and told us to write a poem about it. I came up with a very lovely poem
. To my dismay, I ended up burning it when I burnt all my diaries in 2006 (don't ask ).