11-14-2012, 04:43 PM
Hi,
A great effort. I liked this poem, i did not have to push myself to finish it...your subject and style held me. Whilst i agree that this is a face value poem with not much hidden i do not think that this detracts and in a way strengthens the poem. It is one of those subjects that calls for upfront appraisal. I think the poem acts as a sort of chalk line for people to decide where they stand on this one. I also agree with the comments about the poem almost being two seperate ones. I took it to be a sort of boys V's girls slag off which when i viewed it like this enhanced the content choice for me.
Over-all well done and keep on writing, if this is your standard after only a couple of weeks you def have a emerging talent.
A great effort. I liked this poem, i did not have to push myself to finish it...your subject and style held me. Whilst i agree that this is a face value poem with not much hidden i do not think that this detracts and in a way strengthens the poem. It is one of those subjects that calls for upfront appraisal. I think the poem acts as a sort of chalk line for people to decide where they stand on this one. I also agree with the comments about the poem almost being two seperate ones. I took it to be a sort of boys V's girls slag off which when i viewed it like this enhanced the content choice for me.
Over-all well done and keep on writing, if this is your standard after only a couple of weeks you def have a emerging talent.