11-08-2012, 10:30 PM
Hello Billy. I thought the first 6 lines or so were striking, powerful -
black blood, nibbed across broadsheets - particularly so.
After that it becomes less interesting, moving from specifics to the well-worn and rehearsed. And I don't think that last line is a great way to end a poem.
Yeah, the 2nd half of the poem has a definite I told you so about it.
Nice to be back.
Ray
black blood, nibbed across broadsheets - particularly so.
After that it becomes less interesting, moving from specifics to the well-worn and rehearsed. And I don't think that last line is a great way to end a poem.
Yeah, the 2nd half of the poem has a definite I told you so about it.
Nice to be back.
Ray
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.