(02-27-2010, 09:07 AM)Loveblind Wrote: Nature as a metaphor.Her brightness distracts their view
• Her brightness distracts their view
• A Body floating around in big cotton balls high above
• The tricks under her sleeves always new
• Providing certain cycles people love
• On dreary depressing days she dashes out tears
• Screaming and shouting she drove above
• Yodeling her angelic voice through your ears
• While breezing past you in a fast pace at
• Strong echoes you never fail to hear
• Different color coordinated makeup for her face
• Time passes if not well taken care of
• despite her selfish ways, in her heart is a place
• Gentle like a dove
• Standing up into the skies
• Yet, still able to pushes out black fingered gloves
• She’s there when you rise
• Just take a look outside with your eyes
A Body floating around in big cotton balls high above
The tricks under her sleeve always new
Providing certain cycles people love
On dreary depressing days she dashes out tears
Screaming and shouting above
Yodeling her angelic voice through your ears
While breezing past you at a fast pace
Strong echoes you never fail to hear
Different color coordinated makeup for her face
Time takes it toll if not well taken care of
with her selfish ways we'll be put in our place
Gentle like a dove
Standing up into the skies
Yet, able to push out black fingered glove
She’s there when you rise
Just take a look outside
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i really like it LB.
for me the bullets [•] don't really work. nor dos the title. would it work just as well if it were called; nature or mother nature?
i think this is a good effort. i see some original lines which i like.
ie;
Providing certain cycles people love
Yodeling her angelic voice through your ears
Yet, still able to pushes out black gloves.
nicely done
