This Basement Of Ours

[Keith]

This has a lot going on, some great images dark and forboding, I like the outer world references, they give the words extra depth, could do with a strong edit to clear out unneeded words and to sort out the flow that reads a bit clunkey. Only a moment x2 not sure needed. Fullstop follwed by (Or / And) doesnt need catipals or fullstop
A good trim should really bring out the theme that feels a bit lost in dramatic words.
Thank you for the read