10-22-2012, 07:17 AM
(10-21-2012, 01:40 PM)billy Wrote: it has sadness and a feeling of lossI agree and gives better balance to the flow, I will tweek second edit
the last line particularly poignant. not a bad edit. it feels more complete now.
that torture tenderness
felt a little over the top and i was wondering if it was even needed?
as 'the morphine moments" carries enough weight on it's own
Thanks Billy