My request

[Keith]

1st Draft

I asked you to stop breathing
cease the bellows rhythm,
pretending to soothe base moments,
easy words are lifeless here, wasted on an arid tongue.
Trespassed beyond retreat, rise and fall loop, loop, loop
pressure drops away, bellows broke.

2nd Draft

I asked you to stop breathing
cease the bellows rhythm,
end these morphene moments.
Body now trespassed beyond retreat,
basic in function, rise and fall, rise and fall.
You waited till I slept, I missed your reply.