Over-salted

Over-salted

rowens
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10-15-2012, 03:25 AM

Maybe a comma after "loose-leaf". Otherwise, I like how the shape of the poem relates to the shape of the cobbler, and possibly the speaker.

The comma isn't a very important addition, after you get adjusted to the flow of the lines.

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Over-salted - by Philatone - 10-13-2012, 07:45 AM

RE: Over-salted - by billy - 10-13-2012, 08:13 AM

RE: Over-salted - by popeye - 10-13-2012, 09:05 AM

RE: Over-salted - by Lottie90 - 10-13-2012, 06:28 PM

RE: Over-salted - by just mercedes - 10-14-2012, 08:56 AM

RE: Over-salted - by Todd - 10-14-2012, 10:40 AM

RE: Over-salted - by Philatone - 10-15-2012, 02:48 AM

RE: Over-salted - by rowens - 10-15-2012, 03:25 AM

RE: Over-salted - by billy - 10-17-2012, 09:28 AM

RE: Over-salted - by Todd - 10-17-2012, 09:42 AM

RE: Over-salted - by just mercedes - 10-17-2012, 03:43 PM

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