10-02-2012, 04:09 AM
I like this poem. There are some typos, like a 'their' in place of 'they're', and 'abandon house' might be a choice you made against 'abandoned house'. 'Abandon house' kind of justifies itself as it comes out here. This poem seems to be yelling, and has the authority of the moment's emotion. But what do you want to do with it?