F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing (Revision)

[Philatone]

hey todd!
good to see a piece from you

I suppose we are like an old movie, ...the opening struck me as a little weak; the "I suppose" steals energy, but that may be good for the tone
the black and white,
without the cold complications
of color, reduced to simple tropes
for an unseen audience.
We become the closed
bedroom door,
the giggle and the glance
over breakfast, retracing
intricate steps of a slow dance....like the imagery and scenes here
that implies nothing...this line by itself got more attention than I felt it deserved
more than a kiss in the backseat
of a Continental and the long drag
on a cigarette, which
is still only a cigarette,
and still fashionable
in the way of old Hollywood—
where it is style over subtext,...maybe just me, but the "it" didn't feel specific enough. i lost the subject. I think it's something about Hollywood. also, the abstract nature of this line contrasted heavily with the concrete image of the close
and words between us
are captions written on a screen
I can no longer read.

hope a thought or two is agreeable