09-27-2012, 04:49 AM
The only line that feels a little forced in wording is the one about bending the truth to suit the person, but the meaning is clear. It's a no nonsense direct plea to a person. It doesn't need artsy lines, and you didn't use any, except sort of in the second line. I guess it's your choice how you spell 'alright', and there's a 'your/you're' typo on the line that starts 'I can see inside you'.
It seems pretty cut and dry, if it's really a true story. Serious, and direct.
It seems pretty cut and dry, if it's really a true story. Serious, and direct.
