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F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing (Revision)

F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing (Revision)
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09-26-2012, 07:33 AM
a suggestion to boil the pot even more,

why not put the break after door. that way it breaks away as it does in the movies to the morning where the next scene shows them having breakfast? (if you use a two stanza format)
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RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Aish - 09-25-2012, 04:59 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-25-2012, 05:01 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Aish - 09-25-2012, 05:01 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-25-2012, 05:08 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Leanne - 09-25-2012, 05:12 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-25-2012, 05:20 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by billy - 09-25-2012, 06:54 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-25-2012, 07:11 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Aish - 09-26-2012, 02:02 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-26-2012, 02:41 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by billy - 09-26-2012, 07:33 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-26-2012, 08:12 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Aish - 09-27-2012, 02:46 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-27-2012, 07:50 PM



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