09-26-2012, 02:41 AM
The more I've wrestled with the format, I see three options each has areas I like:
No strophe breaks: Cohesion
Strophe breaks: Introducing additional pauses and perhaps some layering of meaning brought about by the pause.
Two sections: I think if there was one strophe break I really like it's the one on "nothing". It's possible that those two sections will read better broken.
I'm leaning toward no strophe breaks, but honestly it's a pretty fine point either way. If the second section after the "nothing" break focused more like a turn other than an outcome I may be inclined to go that way. It's a piano by feel thing for me at the moment. I don't think the pauses emphasize the way I would like them to with the breaks. That said, I'm still thinking about it.
I appreciate the other look Aish (for me it's usually Bette Davis, but I like Garbo)
No strophe breaks: Cohesion
Strophe breaks: Introducing additional pauses and perhaps some layering of meaning brought about by the pause.
Two sections: I think if there was one strophe break I really like it's the one on "nothing". It's possible that those two sections will read better broken.
I'm leaning toward no strophe breaks, but honestly it's a pretty fine point either way. If the second section after the "nothing" break focused more like a turn other than an outcome I may be inclined to go that way. It's a piano by feel thing for me at the moment. I don't think the pauses emphasize the way I would like them to with the breaks. That said, I'm still thinking about it.
I appreciate the other look Aish (for me it's usually Bette Davis, but I like Garbo)
The secret of poetry is cruelty.--Jon Anderson