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F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing (Revision)

F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing (Revision)
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09-26-2012, 02:02 AM
Personally, I think the strophes hit it out of the ballpark, but that is personal bias for works longer than four or five lines. The piece is great either way. Makes me want to watch a Greta Garbo flick Smile
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Aish - 09-25-2012, 04:59 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-25-2012, 05:01 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Aish - 09-25-2012, 05:01 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-25-2012, 05:08 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Leanne - 09-25-2012, 05:12 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-25-2012, 05:20 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by billy - 09-25-2012, 06:54 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-25-2012, 07:11 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Aish - 09-26-2012, 02:02 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-26-2012, 02:41 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by billy - 09-26-2012, 07:33 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-26-2012, 08:12 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Aish - 09-27-2012, 02:46 AM
RE: F*%ing is a Metaphor for F*%ing - by Todd - 09-27-2012, 07:50 PM



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