09-24-2012, 11:21 AM
hey rich
going to agree with billy; in a repetitive poem, the title can really be one your strongest weapons, and I'm not convinced your using it in the best way.
there is a play between being together and being isolated and the effects that does to people. however, whether due to length or the need of the 'form' to reuse ideas, I don't think that the big picture can be brought out any further. I'm not convinced about how i'm supposed to feel after reading this.
going to agree with billy; in a repetitive poem, the title can really be one your strongest weapons, and I'm not convinced your using it in the best way.
there is a play between being together and being isolated and the effects that does to people. however, whether due to length or the need of the 'form' to reuse ideas, I don't think that the big picture can be brought out any further. I'm not convinced about how i'm supposed to feel after reading this.
Written only for you to consider.