Lovers Paradise

[rowens]

About cliches, a poem can be as cliched and corny as anything in experienced life. The point is whether you're aware that you're saying something that almost anyone would say in the same situation. When you're trying to express love that you actually feel, the temptation is great to simply say all the average stuff, with the sense that it's different this time because you've never said it about this particular lover. You say you want to be a great poet. I guess that means you want to be original and relevant. I tell you my opinion: The rules of language and logic are your tools, they're not sacred or eternal. They are your tools that you can use to do anything you want or need to do. But if you don't know how to use them, they're not tools, only objects. You work with those tools or objects. Simply work with them. And decide, art for art's sake; or do you have something that needs to be said, and poetry is your chosen medium? Work it all out for yourself and just do it. Don't wait till you've worked it out, just do it and see what happens: a bad poem might embarrass you so much that you stumble onto what it takes to make a good or great one. Like learning how to play a harmonica or how to masturbate, just feel it out. Make it happen.

One concern here is your spelling and word usage. 'Paradise' is an example with spelling... 'luminescence stars' would be rather 'luminescent [if I spelled that right] stars'. Proofreading your own work for typos is hard; but it's best if you try to look through the rest of the poem yourself, and try your best to get everything as correct as you want it to be to the best of your ability. If anything is still incorrect or questionable, hopefully someone will point it out for you.