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apathy
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09-06-2012, 09:00 AM
Gotta go with jack on this one... That first stanza is fantastic, and the second one kind of cruises. It needs a more distinct ending, I think. Just small nits, though
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?
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RE: apathy - by rowens - 09-06-2012, 12:54 AM
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RE: apathy - by heslopian - 09-06-2012, 01:09 AM
RE: apathy - by addy - 09-06-2012, 09:00 AM
RE: apathy - by billy - 09-07-2012, 05:43 PM
RE: apathy - by billy - 09-14-2012, 05:38 PM
RE: apathy - by addy - 09-15-2012, 08:39 AM
RE: apathy - by billy - 09-16-2012, 09:26 AM
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