09-03-2012, 02:37 AM
It's a long and winding universal hallway. Universal as in shared, common experience. And that's fine. It just doesn't have many poetic qualities outside of the overall theme. You can check for some typos, too. The poetic expressions that are there are very common, and it's clear you're more interested in getting the message across, and that common, mutual experience is important to that intention. So a lot has to be said in those last lines, which is why they are so difficult to get a hold on, right?