Do You Ever Think Of Me?

[Philatone]

hey laurie! nice to have you
some thoughts

Do You Ever Think Of Me?

On spring mornings when the dew is soft upon the newborn grass,...i think you could trim the articles
when possible feels as if it really may be...this line felt like extra
and dancing irises nod their pretty heads flirtatiously.

On summer days when sunlight promises a loving touch,
when a burst of brilliance erupts up and over into this dimension
and a lifeless shadow shrugs indifference....i think more information about this shadow would really help; as is, it strikes me as a bit more cryptic than needed

On autumn evenings when windswept leaves snap sharply,
when the untamed cyclone beats a rhythm of ambiguous words
and spirals high against the inadequate name of blue.

On winter nights when an icy bed of loneliness collects the silent tears,
when vicious blades of sorrow slice deep into the trench of despair
and the memory of a kiss sings a regretful lullaby.

i like the idea of the progression, what with spring mornings and winter nights. a lot of times, just as i was getting into an image you had, it either felt a little bogged down by the words around (e.g., extra articles or such) or was not elaborated on as much as I would have liked. overall though, I enjoyed the read!