08-12-2012, 08:30 PM
Enjoyed this, Billy. Good rhythm, tale well told. I think you could lose some punctuation to make it smoother but the line that jarred most was
Negotiate around Africa's tip;
For me "around" is very superfluous as it's encompassed by "negotiate"
Negotiate around Africa's tip;
For me "around" is very superfluous as it's encompassed by "negotiate"
Before criticising a person, try walking a mile in their shoes. Then when you do criticise them, you're a mile away.....and you have their shoes.