08-07-2012, 06:07 AM
@ambus:I'm sure there is a deeper and more powerful way to express each line, but if I knew it I wouldn't be looking for help on a poetry critiquing site. Any suggestions are welcome.@billy:I think that is one of my weak points. I tend to write everything that comes into my head and call it a poem. Maybe I should have put this in the prose section.

