08-01-2012, 12:29 AM
(08-01-2012, 12:06 AM)Ruth Wrote: I will never regard ducks in the same way. ("Make Way for Ducklings" is forever ruined for me now)Hi ruth,
Bottom dweller shite narcissism, I like it, and also its continued 'head up it's own arse' analysis of itself, as Todd says, saves us a step.
A bit Bukowskish, a little Franz Wrightish - all and all a self involved curmudgeon of a poem (but I've already said that, haven't I?). It does go on about itself, and I don't think bolding some words added anything to it.
cheers,
ruth
As you may have gathered, this is a nonsense poem. It was not "written" by me but is just a string of trivial words stuck up to look like poetry. The only "reason" for the bold type was to refer the reader to the ridiculously easy ( but completely false) links to the first poem, Starman has left the Building; which is in itself utter garbage masquerading as something cerebral. I have given up completely trying to crit the totally obscure, unpunctuated, mis-spelt and inconsequential stuff that is showing up with too much regularity. For those who TRY to improve, as evinced by the quality of their thoughts, it would be churlish not to offer opinion if there was even the minutest chance that such interference could be construed as helpful. For those who are happy to offer up their prized pond-weed and shite for perusal, I am gone.
Loved your hands.
Best,
tectak